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| #1Subject: Artem Mon Jan 23, 2017 1:10 am | |
| Name: ArtemHomeplanet: ArtemisSentience: SentientStrengthsThe Artem extremely flexible and can surprisingly withstand a ton of punishment, considering their size. They are well liked (due to their neutral friendliness) by nearly every species they’ve come into contact with, and are welcomed by them with open arms in most situations. Said species are also commonly but not always ready to defend them if they are in danger as well. Artem are extremely charismatic and can think quickly in situations when it is needed to. The Artem have received technologies and their from all over the place, giving them a wide variety.WeaknessesThe Artem do not enjoy conflict whatsoever, so they have very little in the way of weaponry. They will not participate in conflict unless they or one of their allies need it, and are not fantastic fighters as a cause of them being peaceful for so long. They don’t seem to be that in tune with magic, although there are a small few with a gift for it.AppearanceArtem differentiate in appearance just as humans do. The only differences are their height, to which they only grow to about 4’5” and that they are double jointed in all of their joints. They also age slower than humans, living about 250 years each. They also have accents similar to the Irish ones from Earth.CultureWhile they used to have religions, they decided to abandon them after conflict started occurring because of it. The Artem follow the rule that if one is nice to the universe, the universe will be nice back. The Artem are always happy to help out other species in nonviolent problems, but are very cautious in situations that require fighting.HistoryThe Artem used to be very warlike actually, and a long time ago, they had a huge conflict, resulting in the species almost being destroyed. This lead to them deciding to be a peaceful nation, and they have recovered since then. They formed a government in which the Artem themselves could each express their opinions to each other, as well as let other species do the same. They have had 1,253,098 High Peacekeepers since then, each one serving for life. High Peacekeeper Alvis is the current one.
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| #2Subject: Re: Artem Mon Jan 23, 2017 1:27 am | |
| - Brakk wrote:
- Said species are also ready to defend them
You can't speak for everyone you're allies with, especially if you're allies with a player controlled faction. Perhaps say "Said species are often ready to defend them"? You could also do with saying that they are neutral rather than being allies with everyone. Otherwise are basically pacifist Dwarves. They seem like pretty chill dudes. Fix that and you're as good as approved. :D |
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| #3Subject: Re: Artem Mon Jan 23, 2017 2:16 am | |
| Alright. I believe I've fixed those problems. Anything else I can improve? |
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| #4Subject: Re: Artem Mon Jan 23, 2017 2:19 am | |
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| #5Subject: Re: Artem Mon Jan 23, 2017 8:24 am | |
| Gnomes! Can't wait.
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